Fixed point
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(08-01-2022, 01:09 PM)Semicircle Wrote:  Hidden under the carpet, a mark–

Turn away, and it’s gone.
Look under, it will disappear.

The mark is there–

When you get up close,
it’ll whisper in your ear,

and tell you all the nice things 
you want to hear.
Hi Sc,
I like the way this reads.  My only comment would be that "mark" might be a little vague or generic.  I am struggling a little to understand what the mark is.
Glad to see you posting.
Take care,
bryn
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Fixed point - by Semicircle - 08-01-2022, 01:09 PM
RE: Fixed point - by brynmawr1 - 08-01-2022, 09:39 PM
RE: Fixed point - by CRNDLSM - 08-11-2022, 10:26 PM



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