Jackson

[Mark A Becker]

I think it would help me if there were a few more specifics about Jackson, e.g. "19 kids go under the gun (in Texas?), yet one survives close by".  Close by where?  How old is Jackson?  He must be a teenager I'm guessing, but that's a big spread.

Also mixed feelings about the final stanza.  It may be that phrase "sting of shame".  Maybe just "sting"?

Tim

Thanks Tim-
Your comments are spot on.  What's clear in the writer's head is not for the reader, so I added some necessary details for clarity.
Mark