Assateague Island

[brynmawr1]

Our Day On Assateague Island

   A summer Sunday
morning opens like a rose     has a better rhythm, i think.  Also, opens suggests morning.  I like the rose simile.
  welcoming the sun...

  On our noontime stroll-
wild ponies across the marsh           comma?
  by loblolly pines...

  Sun beams through trees                could be noun or verb, what ever works for you.
as our shadows stretch eastward
  tall grass waves good-bye...

  Enhanced by moonlight,
your subtle body language
  asking to slow dance.            "Your subtle body language, asks for a moonlight dance."  More dramatic, "demands" or "requires", etc.

Sunday, early Spring-
morning opens like a rose,
  welcoming the sun.
...

  An afternoon stroll-
wild ponies crossing the marsh
  by loblolly pines.
...

  Sun beaming through trees
as our shadows stretch eastward,
  tall grass waves good-bye.
...

  Shadows enhancing
what a body’s language for-
  waltzing with the moon.

Hi Mark,
Really works as written with great heartfelt imagery.  I made few suggestions but who am I to say.  Very nice,
bryn