Assateague Island

[Mark A Becker]

These could almost be four separate poems.  

It's actually 4 scenes within a single day. I'm going to change the title to reflect that.

I do trip over "what a body's language for" everytime I read it.

It is too clunky.  I've revised it.

Thanks for your comments, Tim.

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as our shadows stretch eastward, "as our" is a little too much syllable padding

Within the context of the line, it would've been funny if you said 'strecth' instead of 'padding'.  I've worked this line several times already, so I think I'm gonna need to keep it.

what a body’s language for- a little confusing
 

I agree.  Both you and Tim pointed this one out.

Thanks Paul, I appreciate your observations.