The Contract (now Cannabis)
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(05-28-2022, 01:15 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  [quote="TranquillityBase" pid='259790' dateline='1653398084']
Cannabis

Under the contract
every third day I’m allowed to visit the clouds
where perception is a mirror and Devas dance for a quarter.
My keeper, she holds the tickets to the door
of my tin shack Nirvana.                                             I don't think you need to be specific here
She also holds the secrets of chopping wood, drawing water.  Maybe something like "where I search for" or "where I practice"
She is my tether against becoming lost
to the sky and to her for too long.
The contract is my surrender to a 40 year love,
to the keeper, and to the before and after.

TqB,
I've made some additional suggestions in the middle where it feels a little awkward.  I wrote out some of my ideas but you know what you are looking for.
best,
bryn
PS thanks for your comment on Daffodils.
Thanks Bryn.  I've updated it.  Sort of stuck on tin shack.  I wanted to strees the aritificiality/low rent nature of drug altered consciousness compared to the essentials of living, whether enlightened or not.
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Messages In This Thread
The Contract (now Cannabis) - by TranquillityBase - 05-24-2022, 10:14 PM
RE: The Contract - by brynmawr1 - 05-25-2022, 12:45 AM
RE: The Contract - by Mark A Becker - 05-25-2022, 05:45 AM
RE: The Contract - by TranquillityBase - 05-25-2022, 09:00 AM
RE: The Contract - by brynmawr1 - 05-27-2022, 12:46 PM
RE: The Contract - by TranquillityBase - 05-27-2022, 11:38 PM
RE: The Contract (now Cannabis) - by brynmawr1 - 05-28-2022, 12:35 AM
RE: The Contract (now Cannabis) - by brynmawr1 - 05-28-2022, 01:15 AM
RE: The Contract (now Cannabis) - by TranquillityBase - 06-02-2022, 10:49 PM
RE: The Contract (now Cannabis) - by brynmawr1 - 06-03-2022, 12:37 PM



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