The Contract (now Cannabis)

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Hi Tim-
Not sure what you're going for here.  Maybe it's a placeholder poem until words begin moving in a direction that I've come to expect from you.  No pressure, just sayin...

Under the Contract good enough start
every third day I visit the Cloud still with you
where perception is a mirror and Delilah dances for a quarter. sounds like a porn site
The Keeper holds the tickets, This is where you lose me.
the secrets of chopping wood, drawing water. Now I'm really lost.
The Contract is my surrender With the only context being "every third day", "the Contract" loses meaning/impact. 
not to the Keeper, but to the before and after. Same with "the Keeper"

I will always keep reading your stuff, awaiting those poems that really hit me between the ears- maybe I just don't have the right ear for this one. Though I've read it several times, it always winds up wrapped up in vagueness.

Mark

Thanks Mark.  Vagueness is certainly not my goal here, so I clearly have some work to do.  I was trying to keep it short.  But more showing is called for.

Tim