The Contract (now Cannabis)
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(05-24-2022, 10:14 PM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  Under the Contract
every third day I visit the Cloud
where perception is a mirror and Delilah dances for a quarter.
The Keeper holds the tickets,
the secrets of chopping wood, drawing water.
The Contract is my surrender
not to the Keeper, but to the before and after.
Very nice. I like the tone.  Not much to say.  Maybe a comma after the first contract and a period or semicolon after surrender.
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The Contract (now Cannabis) - by TranquillityBase - 05-24-2022, 10:14 PM
RE: The Contract - by brynmawr1 - 05-25-2022, 12:45 AM
RE: The Contract - by Mark A Becker - 05-25-2022, 05:45 AM
RE: The Contract - by TranquillityBase - 05-25-2022, 09:00 AM
RE: The Contract - by brynmawr1 - 05-27-2022, 12:46 PM
RE: The Contract - by TranquillityBase - 05-27-2022, 11:38 PM
RE: The Contract (now Cannabis) - by brynmawr1 - 05-28-2022, 12:35 AM
RE: The Contract (now Cannabis) - by brynmawr1 - 05-28-2022, 01:15 AM
RE: The Contract (now Cannabis) - by brynmawr1 - 06-03-2022, 12:37 PM



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