4 a.m.

[brynmawr1]

Half-moon, bowl of light
tipped over the horizon
pours out a dead haze.

Half-moon, bowl of light
tipped on its side in the sky
pours out a dead haze.

I like all of the arrangements,, each with their own feel.

A dead haze horizon
half-moon rising
cold white bowl of light
4am, again.

so many possibilities.

I've thrown in a new word choice


Half-moon rising,
cold white bowl of light
pouring out its dead glaze,
4 a.m., again.

I like the ending on yours, Tranq.  Ends with the right feel.