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05-23-2022, 11:19 PM

(08-28-2020, 11:59 PM)Torkelburger Wrote: Cattle (a Haibun)

not the odor This is a bit confusing, flies wouldn't be disseminated by odor. They are drawn to it.
but skilled tails
disseminate flies

The first line needs reworking. Otherwize this is strong poem.

Thanks for the read, sc

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Cattle - by Torkelburger - 08-28-2020, 11:59 PM

RE: Cattle - by Semicircle - 05-23-2022, 11:19 PM

RE: Cattle - by Torkelburger - 06-23-2022, 02:35 AM

RE: Cattle - by Magpie - 05-23-2022, 11:44 PM

RE: Cattle - by dukealien - 05-24-2022, 04:01 AM

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