Wait for yours
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(02-27-2022, 08:01 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  What's hurtin' honey?
Could it be all the sugar
causing your blood booger?

All the tears you're feigning,
if I had a quarter for each,
happiness would be just out of reach.   I agree that this seems forced here.  seems a little contradictory having all those quarters and not reaching happiness.

You wait for yours, son
it's coming.
Yes, wait son,
it's coming.

What's following after curfew nephew?
Must be that trail of smoke
your starting to toke.

All the screaming that will follow,
well, it's a bit tough to swallow.

You wait for yours, son
it's coming.
Yes, wait son,
it's coming.

Behind the folds
and the corners
where we went
and remain,
you'll trace our steps
in your head,
over and over,
and regret like we did.              "finding only regret."

We know better than to stop you,
so go ahead.
Yours is coming son,                      nice ending.
like I said,
yours is coming.
I know a lot of people don't like repetition but I think it works here by adding to a sense of foreboding and inevitably.  Thanks
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Messages In This Thread
Wait for yours - by Semicircle - 02-27-2022, 08:01 AM
RE: Wait for yours - by CRNDLSM - 03-06-2022, 07:35 AM
RE: Wait for yours - by brynmawr1 - 05-14-2022, 12:02 AM



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