a simple plea
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(03-23-2022, 10:52 PM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  my dog barks incessantly
at the Egyptian geese

who’ve shown up to fill the void.
my wife doesn’t seem concerned.

she just wants me to be happy.
is this how things are supposed to end?

it’s okay, if so,
but a little definition would be nice.




my dog barks incessantly

at the Egyptian geese



who’ve shown up to fill the void.

my wife doesn’t seem concerned.



she just wants me to be happy.

is this how things are supposed to end?



if so, then that’s okay

but a little definition would be nice. 



you see, I've misplaced my life,

if you find it, please 



return it, maybe

these night sweats will stop.











i’ve misplaced my life



if you find it



please return it here







maybe if i get it back



these night sweats will stop







my dog barks incessantly



at the Egyptian geese



who’ve shown up to fill the void







my wife doesn’t seem concerned



she just wants me to be happy







is this how things are supposed to end?



if so, then that’s okay







but a little definition would be nice

I really like the "misplaced life" idea so was sorry to see it go.  Could you work it in in some form early with the dog barking and the void.  I feel like it would help set the tone and theme early.  thanks.
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Messages In This Thread
a simple plea - by TranquillityBase - 03-23-2022, 10:52 PM
RE: a simple plea - by Knot - 03-23-2022, 11:26 PM
RE: a simple plea - by Magpie - 03-24-2022, 02:16 AM
RE: a simple plea - by TranquillityBase - 03-25-2022, 02:53 AM
RE: a simple plea - by Knot - 03-25-2022, 03:12 AM
RE: a simple plea - by TranquillityBase - 03-26-2022, 07:33 AM
RE: a simple plea Rev. 3 - by TranquillityBase - 04-11-2022, 07:32 AM
RE: a simple plea - by Semicircle - 04-26-2022, 12:42 AM
RE: a simple plea - by Erthona - 05-05-2022, 06:11 PM
RE: a simple plea - by brynmawr1 - 05-11-2022, 02:01 AM



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