05-10-2022, 09:20 PM
(05-10-2022, 11:06 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote:Rather than giving the shoes human feelings, I would cut that and focus on what remains. I think your third stanza makes for a better ending.Old ShoeOld shoes tattered and worn,
sit in the corner,
maybe forgotten, so forlorn.
Laces frayed, covered in dirt and holes;
Soles worn and flapping. loose this is sort of a still life, so the sole(s) wouldn't be flapping,,,,
But this old shoe sits not sad.
Every scuff and stain a story to give.
A story of steps taken, roads well traveled.
Longing for the shiny and new
is to deny a life well lived.
Battered and torn, such a shoe
might sit sad and alone,
but shoes never do.
The best part of such a life
is that shoes come in sets of two.

