Old Shoes edit

[The Karate Kid Part 2]

Old Shoe

 

Old shoe tattered and worn,

sits in the corner,

maybe forgotten, so forlorn.

 

Laces frayed, covered in dirt and holes;

Sole worn and flapping.

But this old shoe sits not sad.

 

Every scuff and stain a story to give.

A story of steps taken, roads well traveled.

Longing for the shiny and new

is to deny a life well lived.

 

Battered and torn, such a shoe

might sit sad and alone,

but shoes never do.

The best part of such a life 

is that shoes come in sets of two.

Thanks in advance.

There's a lot of, what is unaffectionately known, as Yoda-speak to force a rhyme. And, although you might have a relatively nice idea for a poem, it makes reading it feel silly—which, I assume, isn't the intention. For example, "every scuff and stain a story to give". Better you can do.

I would suggest either scrap the rhyme and concentrate on the concept, or work more on the rhyme.