Sea of people
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(04-12-2022, 01:17 PM)Semicircle Wrote:  You can tread on us 
in our abundance.
some aren't stable-
watch your step now.

We coagulate underfoot,
falling away without sound
back into a struggling ocean
that clamors to support your feet.

You're running full sprint, trying to escape 
ascending higher and higher, cresting the peek of your wave
reduced to a needle piercing clouds.

We understand, it's hard up there
and there is no escaping us,
so come down please.
Settle the ocean,
find peace,
die.
Very interesting poem.  For me, it comes to a climax with the lines of stanza 3, my favorite lines in the poem.  I don't quite get the final stanza.  Perhaps it's the use of pronouns that Xlaterus mentions, or perhaps it's just not needed.  I read it as the ocean being something else besides a body of water, though it could be that.
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Messages In This Thread
Sea of people - by Semicircle - 04-12-2022, 01:17 PM
RE: Drop Off - by Stash - 04-12-2022, 05:54 PM
RE: Drop Off - by Semicircle - 04-13-2022, 10:41 AM
RE: Drop Off - by Xlateralus - 04-16-2022, 01:56 PM
RE: Drop Off - by TranquillityBase - 04-16-2022, 10:29 PM
RE: Sea of people - by Semicircle - 04-17-2022, 11:17 AM
RE: Sea of people - by Xlateralus - 04-17-2022, 12:42 PM



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