03-28-2022, 11:02 PM
Hey Semi C-
Does it help the person your critiqueing to rewrite their poem completely?
No. I like what busker said in this regard: It’s like learning to drive - you don’t help by taking the wheel and showing how it’s done.
Would it show what they could be doing, or is that unhelpful?
I can only hope the poem shows me what it's doing, so a full re-write is not helpful. That said, I have re-arranged poems here while trying to retain as much of the original wording as possible: ie I mostly subtract instead of add, hopefully showing which words/phrases had the most impact on me.
If I like an idea, and wanna do I re-write, I'll just steal the general idea and write my own poem. The quirky/realistic/pastoral nature of work by Tim (aka T.Base) has inspired me in that regard.
What is your process, you, the viewer of this post??????
I generally react to the the way words hit my eyes and ears.
I pay attention to accuracy. I always appreciate when someone points out inaccuracies in my poems.
I pay attention to details like line breaks and internal or end-rhyming. I appreciate when folks notice that I'm trying to be "too poetic".
I pay attention to meter/rhythm to hopefully point out areas where I'm tripped up. I appreciate when people tell me where I fail in that regard.
I pay attention to words that steer a poem off course, and appreciate when critique highlights even a single word that I use that clouds clarity.
What do you think????
I think that the spirit of Billy and Leanne offer the best quidance on this very site: please see "How to use the Pen: Critique/Feedback: Giving and Getting It"
Does it help the person your critiqueing to rewrite their poem completely?
No. I like what busker said in this regard: It’s like learning to drive - you don’t help by taking the wheel and showing how it’s done.
Would it show what they could be doing, or is that unhelpful?
I can only hope the poem shows me what it's doing, so a full re-write is not helpful. That said, I have re-arranged poems here while trying to retain as much of the original wording as possible: ie I mostly subtract instead of add, hopefully showing which words/phrases had the most impact on me.
If I like an idea, and wanna do I re-write, I'll just steal the general idea and write my own poem. The quirky/realistic/pastoral nature of work by Tim (aka T.Base) has inspired me in that regard.
What is your process, you, the viewer of this post??????
I generally react to the the way words hit my eyes and ears.
I pay attention to accuracy. I always appreciate when someone points out inaccuracies in my poems.
I pay attention to details like line breaks and internal or end-rhyming. I appreciate when folks notice that I'm trying to be "too poetic".
I pay attention to meter/rhythm to hopefully point out areas where I'm tripped up. I appreciate when people tell me where I fail in that regard.
I pay attention to words that steer a poem off course, and appreciate when critique highlights even a single word that I use that clouds clarity.
What do you think????
I think that the spirit of Billy and Leanne offer the best quidance on this very site: please see "How to use the Pen: Critique/Feedback: Giving and Getting It"