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The Flying Kite Syndrome

The Flying Kite Syndrome
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#4
03-28-2022, 08:59 PM
Not so much of a critique, but more of a reiteration that line breaks would help your work to be more like a poem and less like prose. Your previous poem was the same, good content but reads like prose.

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Messages In This Thread
The Flying Kite Syndrome - by Wavey - 03-28-2022, 06:39 AM
RE: The Flying Kite Syndrome - by Semicircle - 03-28-2022, 06:57 AM
RE: The Flying Kite Syndrome - by CRNDLSM - 03-28-2022, 09:16 AM
RE: The Flying Kite Syndrome - by Magpie - 03-28-2022, 08:59 PM
RE: The Flying Kite Syndrome - by Mark A Becker - 03-28-2022, 11:29 PM
RE: The Flying Kite Syndrome - by rowens - 03-30-2022, 07:34 AM
RE: The Flying Kite Syndrome - by busker - 03-30-2022, 08:09 AM
RE: The Flying Kite Syndrome - by rowens - 03-30-2022, 08:13 AM



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