Isolation
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(10-30-2019, 11:37 PM)Pinprick Wrote:  Isolation

My mind’s desolation
Lost in translation
Hypnotic contemplation

Isolation

Perpetual frustration
Manic desperation
Slum city nation

Isolation

Particle deprivation
Overdose vacation
Relapse relocation

Isolation 

My only destination
False proclamation
No emancipation

Isolation 

Brain restoration
Idea immigration
Cortex complication

Isolation
I feel like most of the words in this poem
are just filler.

I suggest not repeating isolation
after each stanza, maybe just at the beginning and end
would work better.

Thanks for the read,
best SC.
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Isolation - by Pinprick - 10-30-2019, 11:37 PM
RE: Isolation - by UselessBlueprint - 11-01-2019, 01:19 PM
RE: Isolation - by Semicircle - 03-12-2022, 02:10 PM



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