Late February - edit
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Spring’s unstealthy early
warm wild winds
wound Winter mortally

pale darkness seems to seep
through blinds and bleeds
out hoarded health
leaving us listless
vainly awaiting Easter which
too many will not reach



Thanks to both critics.  I've tried to dilute the purple phrases in this edit as well as sustain a theme which terminates at the end.  Late winter malaise, anyone?
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Late February - edit - by dukealien - 02-20-2022, 06:30 AM
RE: Late February - by busker - 02-20-2022, 10:22 AM
RE: Late February - by Mark A Becker - 02-21-2022, 01:18 AM
RE: Late February - edit - by dukealien - 02-23-2022, 12:59 AM
RE: Late February - edit - by Knot - 02-23-2022, 02:31 AM
RE: Late February - edit - by RiverNotch - 02-25-2022, 05:34 PM
RE: Late February - edit - by Magpie - 03-22-2022, 02:55 AM
RE: Late February - edit - by dukealien - 03-22-2022, 09:46 PM



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