02-21-2022, 01:18 AM
Hey Duke-
Those temporary thaws are always welcome here in VA
Spring comes unstealth’ly early
winter beheads itself with warm wild winds
cloud suffocates its cold
thirsty pale darkness seems to seep
through window blinds yet bleeds
us of our winter-hoarded heat
to slake these season-slaying gales
that leave us lurching listless
vainly awaiting Easter which
too many may not reach.
For me, this one is striving to reach that final line, which is quite unexpected. Some of my favorite phrases are: warm wild winds pale darkness seems to seep. Some of the other language is a bit over-the-top for me, like leave us lurching listless.
Still, it altogether doesn't add up to the ending.
As you know, I always strip things down, and attempted a stripped down version, below. I was trying to see how I could arrive at that last line, but did not succeed. I think some previous lines need to reference the pandemic (which is what I take is what you're alluding to with the end line).
This is a tricky one.
Spring soon,
wild winds warming winter,
still, lingering darkness bleeds
through blinds
longing for sunny Easter,
which many may not reach.
Those temporary thaws are always welcome here in VA
Spring comes unstealth’ly early
winter beheads itself with warm wild winds
cloud suffocates its cold
thirsty pale darkness seems to seep
through window blinds yet bleeds
us of our winter-hoarded heat
to slake these season-slaying gales
that leave us lurching listless
vainly awaiting Easter which
too many may not reach.
For me, this one is striving to reach that final line, which is quite unexpected. Some of my favorite phrases are: warm wild winds pale darkness seems to seep. Some of the other language is a bit over-the-top for me, like leave us lurching listless.
Still, it altogether doesn't add up to the ending.
As you know, I always strip things down, and attempted a stripped down version, below. I was trying to see how I could arrive at that last line, but did not succeed. I think some previous lines need to reference the pandemic (which is what I take is what you're alluding to with the end line).
This is a tricky one.
Spring soon,
wild winds warming winter,
still, lingering darkness bleeds
through blinds
longing for sunny Easter,
which many may not reach.