12-23-2021, 06:02 AM
(12-20-2021, 07:25 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: two gaggles of geeseHey Paul-
rehearsing their migration-
honking like rush hour
HA HA ... a backed-up city in the sky. I wonder if they give each other the feather.
A suggestion: maybe "for" instead of "their". Or not- it hits the Mark either way.
I always like syllabic poems that use words like "hour" or "fire" which are, in fact, one syllable yet sound like two.
Add a simple "s" and they do become two syllable words: it may be an subtle indication of a mental abnormality that I notice things like this...
Mark

