Draft 2: I Am We

[TranquillityBase]

Hey TqB! In what ways do you find the combination of cosmic/carnal appealing but discordant?

I narrowed it down to the lines

"and, as the months slip into moments and moments into graves"

(this is a beautiful line, but a moment before we were going galactic, now we are suddenly talking about graves.  I will say it works better in this second version, since you moved the gun section up.  So maybe I'm going to tell you to ignore me....)

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"from the bread and meat in our stomachs and the rounds we share"

(the physicality of this line doesn't seem needed)