10-10-2021, 01:38 PM
I didn't like the "My body is a shell" line breaks.
I feel like they are unecessary and the point comes across better without them.
Maybe you could try and replace them or delete them.
I really liked the surrealist imagery, the poem takes you on twists and turns that you don't expect.
It's just there, in your face.
Good job
I feel like they are unecessary and the point comes across better without them.
Maybe you could try and replace them or delete them.
I really liked the surrealist imagery, the poem takes you on twists and turns that you don't expect.
It's just there, in your face.
Good job