Necropolis

[CRNDLSM]

Malformed and bruised,
shambling-- 
mushroom blue stained corridor;
pearly eyes glimmering behind translucent fog.
I like punctuation, but the periods give me fragment vibes 
Large courtyard,
upheaved gravestones,
red corpses;
sprawled over in heeps.pretty vivid setting, how about vast instead of large?

Emerging from a musty dug-out hole
to join an exodus
of decayed zombies and preturbed spirits
all diverging down an eroded casm.
There may be a few too many adjectives zombies are pretty decayed
Ascending a circular staircasedown the chasm and up the staircase?
adorned with burning crosses
and false gods.
Crammed within a narrow gap--
a long fall below. 
I feel like I'm traveling too fast
Banshee screams reach crescendo Ii thought a crescendo was not a point to reach, but the act of reaching
as the journey grows closer to an end. Not a fan of this line
Hideous human-animal amalgamations I like amalgamations
hobble across broken concrete
outside the staircases.

A giant colloseum 
at the summit of the mountain.
Four openings--
on each side, 
usher in streams of the undead.
Unsure how many sides, 16 openings? 20?
Thousands descend a vertical drop
inside the crator within.
Down to the giant ant-death-spiral of Kaaba.
Where they die 
over
and over
and over 
again.i like this whole block just by itself

Nimrod Bodfish observes from above on his obsidian vessel.
The time for restoration is soon. Seems essential

This could all end 
but there is one that won't ever die: 
Hym Watcher. I understand it would all end if hym could die, so there's a goal to end hym?

I like nimrod bodfish as a name, thanks for sharing