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In What We Trust (4)

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In What We Trust (4)
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09-30-2021, 11:50 AM
Great work Mark.  

One minor quibble about this line in stanza 4,  "can seem so finely attuned to something". Why "seem"?  I'm in no doubt that dog sees more of God than we do.

Tim
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In What We Trust (4) - by Mark A Becker - 09-29-2021, 06:19 AM
RE: In What We Trust - by Tiger the Lion - 09-29-2021, 12:10 PM
RE: In What We Trust - by TranquillityBase - 09-29-2021, 12:12 PM
RE: In What We Trust - by RiverNotch - 09-29-2021, 03:16 PM
RE: In What We Trust - by Mark A Becker - 09-29-2021, 10:50 PM
RE: In What We Trust REV - by busker - 09-30-2021, 03:56 AM
RE: In What We Trust REV - by Mark A Becker - 09-30-2021, 04:40 AM
RE: In What We Trust (rev.2) - by TranquillityBase - 09-30-2021, 11:50 AM
RE: In What We Trust (rev.2) - by Mark A Becker - 09-30-2021, 10:02 PM



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