09-30-2021, 05:36 AM
Hey rowens,
Been awhile since I've seen you around these parts. Though this is MISC, a few comments:
There's nothing in the window
that could prepare
the child outside the head, his head? her head? their head? its head? This line threw me off
the cat is not
what the newborn thinks,
crouching there, an arched black
soft foreignness erecting a smile
warm in invisible; You may need this line, but I don't
The kind of present
forgiveness makes
is not extant
in the very era
and every happenstance, midday, salted I don't need this part either
conversation; the mouth and all
the senses once lunged
are not deleted- outside
the head is a future bride. I see the repetition of "outside the head", and it works here, but not earlier, even though the end refers back to the beginning.
I imagine it's known to you what ties the parts together, but it's very unclear to me, other than alluding to the external world "outside the head."
Good to see that you remain an enigma,
Mark
Been awhile since I've seen you around these parts. Though this is MISC, a few comments:
There's nothing in the window
that could prepare
the child outside the head, his head? her head? their head? its head? This line threw me off
the cat is not
what the newborn thinks,
crouching there, an arched black
soft foreignness erecting a smile
warm in invisible; You may need this line, but I don't
The kind of present
forgiveness makes
is not extant
in the very era
and every happenstance, midday, salted I don't need this part either
conversation; the mouth and all
the senses once lunged
are not deleted- outside
the head is a future bride. I see the repetition of "outside the head", and it works here, but not earlier, even though the end refers back to the beginning.
I imagine it's known to you what ties the parts together, but it's very unclear to me, other than alluding to the external world "outside the head."
Good to see that you remain an enigma,
Mark