09-26-2021, 08:27 AM
I like the overall idea, but can't help but ask - why is it that it is the sky that is wounded, but the night that is slain? It's the sort of loose thread that sticks out more prominently in the short form.
But I did like the image of blood seeping out of an expiring night into a cloud-streaked dawn sky.
But I did like the image of blood seeping out of an expiring night into a cloud-streaked dawn sky.