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draft 4: self-similar

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09-24-2021, 11:50 PM

(09-23-2021, 02:24 AM)alexorande Wrote: Hi all,

New draft posted. I couldn't get the previous versions to format correctly so I gave up and removed them from the post. I had this thread switched over to moderate critique anyways so it can just be like starting new. Thanks for reading

I like it. I'm sticking with my surrealist reading Wink

Wink

But I can see you added some very instensive images to what was already a very pleasingly dense poem. And I like what you did with the ending.

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draft 4: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 09-19-2021, 03:17 AM

RE: self-similar - by TranquillityBase - 09-19-2021, 03:42 AM

RE: draft 2: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 09-19-2021, 04:32 PM

RE: draft 2: self-similar - by TranquillityBase - 09-19-2021, 09:00 PM

RE: draft 2: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 09-20-2021, 04:34 AM

RE: draft 2: self-similar - by TranquillityBase - 09-20-2021, 10:19 AM

RE: draft 2: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 09-20-2021, 12:17 PM

RE: draft 2: self-similar - by TranquillityBase - 09-20-2021, 09:07 PM

RE: draft 2: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 09-20-2021, 09:55 PM

RE: draft 3: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 09-23-2021, 02:24 AM

RE: draft 3: self-similar - by TranquillityBase - 09-24-2021, 11:50 PM

RE: draft 4: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 09-30-2021, 06:00 AM

RE: draft 4: self-similar - by TranquillityBase - 09-30-2021, 09:07 AM

RE: draft 4: self-similar - by Mark A Becker - 10-01-2021, 05:21 AM

RE: draft 4: self-similar - by alonso ramoran - 10-01-2021, 09:44 AM

RE: draft 4: self-similar - by RiverNotch - 10-13-2021, 05:52 PM

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