09-22-2021, 01:09 PM
(09-22-2021, 09:03 AM)ISawASpaceship Wrote: I lengthened those lines like you suggested. Thank you for saying that. I have a habit of making too many pauses and my writing sometimes can sound very choppy because of it. I'm trying to fix that habit.Well, it gives it a breathless quality, which is not all bad. Maybe just varying the line lengths, some sections in that style, others where you go longer. If that makes any sense.
Anyway, Welcome to Pig Pen
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