09-03-2021, 08:26 PM
I loved reading this. I think you've nailed down the scene vividly. The rhyme and pacing is also done right.
I liked how you took the time to end it properly, and not just leave it halfway after having introduced us to the roach and the beetle.
Great stuff!
I liked how you took the time to end it properly, and not just leave it halfway after having introduced us to the roach and the beetle.
Great stuff!

