Another Lonely Night

[billy]

I know it lacks some imagery, but it's something simple I wrote on the go.

It’s 3 a.m.
Hidden deep in my
Basement
The shadow of the
Street light glare (light's)
Printed on my walls

Jaded in the eyes (Jaded eyes)
Black mascara running
Down to my check bones (i think you meant down my cheek, but this
Physically alive but spiritually dead ....works really well)
Soul detached from the body
Walking around in the live less
Basement

My back pressed against the wall
A note book with paper falling out (how about spilling instead of falling )
And a pen on top next to my leg
A joint in my hand

Smoking all my troubles
Out of the window
Hoping the animosity
In me would jump in
Someone else walking
The streets of New York City

I love the above verse LB

And even when my lungs
Began to hurt
I kept going
Just to get the
Motivation I needed
To create a master piece

this verse too

not bad at all in my opinion LB. for me a few mistakes that actually work,
unless they aren't mistakes ;

down to my cheek bones

walking around in the live less
basement (which i love.)

thanks for the read as usual LB.