The Alley Ends
with over run- interesting run-on with the title
ning vines and loose debris from dec- rhythm,
ades of decay and redirec- mid word rhymes, enjambed
ting energy sent, From the sun comma and capital, is this one breath? New sentence?
and circling sky in- weather changes, time
habitants shift with the rains a- why an alley would be over run with vines, inhabitants leave with the weather and animal life changes
bandoning their hunger pains, a- cheap rhyme
nother day to stay Is dyin' another cheap rhyme, I like the last three syllables of each stanza being the start of the next stanza
though the final voy- these enjambments are crazy
age? Hind sight's just as blind as fore- I like the 'age' repetition here because of the time
sight. Calculating ancient stor- hindsight and foresight are pretty forced,
age, El Dorado's, Even Troy's fictional ancient places,
ruins had been un- very bouncy rhythm
earthed, revealing nothing extra- I think it's funny this line still counts as an enjambed rhyme
ordinary. In context, tra- so forced but I get it
dition's are scholar's Opinions right? Who's to really say what was going on way back when
sway, cultural lend- cultural lenders, I like that, it's like the scholars are putting their own culture into historical findings, able to take it back later
ers walk the streets, between the buil- in the alley
dings. Leave their thoughts with broken pill- how about 'leaving thoughts on broken' instead
ars as they reach The alley's end. Back to the beginning
I did really like this, it's a fun funny exercise, what's the point? Does the enjambment have anything to do with the reason we have ancient digups? Could you do this again with a different subject? I think in some ways you were just showing off but I didn't mind. Thanks for sharing
with over run- interesting run-on with the title
ning vines and loose debris from dec- rhythm,
ades of decay and redirec- mid word rhymes, enjambed
ting energy sent, From the sun comma and capital, is this one breath? New sentence?
and circling sky in- weather changes, time
habitants shift with the rains a- why an alley would be over run with vines, inhabitants leave with the weather and animal life changes
bandoning their hunger pains, a- cheap rhyme
nother day to stay Is dyin' another cheap rhyme, I like the last three syllables of each stanza being the start of the next stanza
though the final voy- these enjambments are crazy
age? Hind sight's just as blind as fore- I like the 'age' repetition here because of the time
sight. Calculating ancient stor- hindsight and foresight are pretty forced,
age, El Dorado's, Even Troy's fictional ancient places,
ruins had been un- very bouncy rhythm
earthed, revealing nothing extra- I think it's funny this line still counts as an enjambed rhyme
ordinary. In context, tra- so forced but I get it
dition's are scholar's Opinions right? Who's to really say what was going on way back when
sway, cultural lend- cultural lenders, I like that, it's like the scholars are putting their own culture into historical findings, able to take it back later
ers walk the streets, between the buil- in the alley
dings. Leave their thoughts with broken pill- how about 'leaving thoughts on broken' instead
ars as they reach The alley's end. Back to the beginning
I did really like this, it's a fun funny exercise, what's the point? Does the enjambment have anything to do with the reason we have ancient digups? Could you do this again with a different subject? I think in some ways you were just showing off but I didn't mind. Thanks for sharing