08-14-2021, 08:47 PM
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Hi TqB,
I'd happily read the whole thing just for these lines
just across the dirt road
that borders this dream
lies Mexico.
but not that often. The rest seems rather flat, to me, slight paradoxes, random, dream-like changes of focus, but lacking in anything particularity nauseating, or newsworthy. There's a lot of 'I am this' and 'I am that', but it doesn't seem to build to anything vaguely climactic.
The 'dirt road' lines seem to promise an examination of what is America/the America dream these days, but perhaps that's a whole 'nother poem.
Best, Knot
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Hi TqB,
I'd happily read the whole thing just for these lines
just across the dirt road
that borders this dream
lies Mexico.
but not that often. The rest seems rather flat, to me, slight paradoxes, random, dream-like changes of focus, but lacking in anything particularity nauseating, or newsworthy. There's a lot of 'I am this' and 'I am that', but it doesn't seem to build to anything vaguely climactic.
The 'dirt road' lines seem to promise an examination of what is America/the America dream these days, but perhaps that's a whole 'nother poem.
Best, Knot
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