Antietam Lullaby
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Tim,

A bit Whitmanesque. Could use a little tightening up as to the grammar to make it a bit more readable (such as this dependent clause" "On the field dimly covered in dead and wounded, the land of the free.") . Although a complex topic, this is a nice internal view.

best,

dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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Antietam Lullaby - by TranquillityBase - 06-21-2021, 09:09 PM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by dukealien - 06-21-2021, 09:56 PM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by busker - 06-23-2021, 04:07 AM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by Mark A Becker - 06-23-2021, 06:58 AM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by TranquillityBase - 06-23-2021, 10:29 AM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by Mark A Becker - 06-21-2021, 10:02 PM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by TranquillityBase - 06-22-2021, 12:50 AM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by Erthona - 06-25-2021, 09:05 AM
RE: Antietam Lullaby - by Brian Roberts - 07-13-2021, 12:55 AM



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