06-05-2021, 08:40 PM
Hi micah,
I think this poem should go deeper.
I found this quote about the subject: "Cats hide in solitude when they are gravely ill. In the wild, a dying cat instinctively understands that they are more vulnerable to predators. Hiding is a way to protect themselves."
Puts a new spin on it, doesn't it?
You could still retain your ending, but specify it's us humans who are the cowards about death. I remember reading once that one of the things that distinguish us from the animal world is we know we are going to die. Animals do not (I don't know if this is scientifically proven).
Just some thoughts, if you are interested in exploring this in more detail in your poem.
I think this poem should go deeper.
I found this quote about the subject: "Cats hide in solitude when they are gravely ill. In the wild, a dying cat instinctively understands that they are more vulnerable to predators. Hiding is a way to protect themselves."
Puts a new spin on it, doesn't it?
You could still retain your ending, but specify it's us humans who are the cowards about death. I remember reading once that one of the things that distinguish us from the animal world is we know we are going to die. Animals do not (I don't know if this is scientifically proven).
Just some thoughts, if you are interested in exploring this in more detail in your poem.