05-06-2021, 11:50 AM
edit1;
Laundry-room booms:
pants and woolly balls
meant to part them
flop and thunder in the dryer
random kettle-pounding
like camel-slung tympani
beating fervent pas de charge
for scimitar-spinning cavalry
in brisk bright dawning
of Islamic empire.
A wealth of good critique, including the approving voices (saying it's worth editing since *some* of it is working for *someone*).
@Mark - thick-skinned? I? Well, perhaps like the sensitive elephant who weeps as he charges. Hope this *sounds* better even if it doesn't make any more sense.
@Knot - at one point during editing I had it almost pruned to your spare version, but it grew back. Worth the exercise.
@Thunderembargo - thinking more of the initial eruption of Islam out of Arabia just as Rome and Persia had worn each other out with total war and plague. The timing was lucky in the extreme - good time to be a fresh religion, relatively tolerant, with somewhat malleable doctrines. This does not excuse the Inquisition, but as a very good teacher once told me, we study history not to blame but to understand.
Laundry-room booms:
pants and woolly balls
meant to part them
flop and thunder in the dryer
random kettle-pounding
like camel-slung tympani
beating fervent pas de charge
for scimitar-spinning cavalry
in brisk bright dawning
of Islamic empire.
A wealth of good critique, including the approving voices (saying it's worth editing since *some* of it is working for *someone*).
@Mark - thick-skinned? I? Well, perhaps like the sensitive elephant who weeps as he charges. Hope this *sounds* better even if it doesn't make any more sense.
@Knot - at one point during editing I had it almost pruned to your spare version, but it grew back. Worth the exercise.
@Thunderembargo - thinking more of the initial eruption of Islam out of Arabia just as Rome and Persia had worn each other out with total war and plague. The timing was lucky in the extreme - good time to be a fresh religion, relatively tolerant, with somewhat malleable doctrines. This does not excuse the Inquisition, but as a very good teacher once told me, we study history not to blame but to understand.
Non-practicing atheist