Spring Lament

[Knot]

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Hi TqB,

I'm not arguing against a longer poem, but that adding to what it there without pruning the weaker/irrelevant parts won't improve the piece.

Though it will, inevitably, be longer

Cut the waste, add the new stuff, call it version three.

(Here's the Stevie Smith

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/4...t-drowning )

If you can find a way to avoid the 'drowning' and somehow make the lawnmower (or even lawns) the dominant metaphor so much the better.

Best, Knot

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