03-06-2021, 06:25 AM
Thanks everyone for the excellent feedback. I will most definitely fix the title (delete the narrative label), remove the first stanza completely, make sure things are only stated once, and perhaps develop the men/church interaction (without being verbose or repetitive). Keep editing it down.
I kept too much of my "word vomiting" on my scratch paper when I had become inspired and did about five separate, 10-minute (timed) freewriting sessions. But the words kept spinning in my head and I didn't let it sit for very long, so when it came time to edit I just couldn't figure out what to get rid of. I'm going to let it sit and then work on it for a couple weeks before doing the next draft.
Just wanted to get an idea of what to focus on. Now I have a good start.
I kept too much of my "word vomiting" on my scratch paper when I had become inspired and did about five separate, 10-minute (timed) freewriting sessions. But the words kept spinning in my head and I didn't let it sit for very long, so when it came time to edit I just couldn't figure out what to get rid of. I'm going to let it sit and then work on it for a couple weeks before doing the next draft.
Just wanted to get an idea of what to focus on. Now I have a good start.