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Around Back
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#6
02-27-2021, 04:02 AM
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Hi TqB

I'm relieved. If you decided to keep this form I'd suggest revisiting 'dead' (I don't think you need it, it's strongly implied by 'Lazarus') and perhaps play a bit with 'around back'. Would
around

back. Around

work?

Oh yes, and get a better title! Smile


Best, Knot


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Messages In This Thread
Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 02-24-2021, 02:58 AM
RE: Around Back - by Miley - 02-26-2021, 07:08 AM
RE: Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 02-26-2021, 11:10 AM
RE: Around Back - by Knot - 02-26-2021, 09:45 PM
RE: Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 02-27-2021, 12:48 AM
RE: Around Back - by Knot - 02-27-2021, 04:02 AM
RE: Around Back - by Mark A Becker - 03-22-2021, 06:18 AM
RE: Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 03-23-2021, 04:40 AM
RE: Around Back - by Mark A Becker - 03-23-2021, 11:54 PM
RE: Around Back - by Majestic Sun - 05-05-2021, 01:21 PM



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