Around Back
#4
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Hi TqB,
I get lost on 'outside out' and 'about it lost'
but lines like 'waiting gives back a moment' are excellent.
I think you might do more with your line endings
and for some reason I want this to start with S5.

Some cut and paste thoughts


End with a love song

maybe in the night
maybe not at all.

It seems to be night

inside and out. Wait.
This is where

waiting gives back

a moment. Four days
dead Lazarus had no words

left, waiting

for the second time
around.

Around back

you will find
a third time,

because the living hate

nothing
like a void.



Best, Knot



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Messages In This Thread
Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 02-24-2021, 02:58 AM
RE: Around Back - by Miley - 02-26-2021, 07:08 AM
RE: Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 02-26-2021, 11:10 AM
RE: Around Back - by Knot - 02-26-2021, 09:45 PM
RE: Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 02-27-2021, 12:48 AM
RE: Around Back - by Knot - 02-27-2021, 04:02 AM
RE: Around Back - by Mark A Becker - 03-22-2021, 06:18 AM
RE: Around Back - by TranquillityBase - 03-23-2021, 04:40 AM
RE: Around Back - by Mark A Becker - 03-23-2021, 11:54 PM
RE: Around Back - by Majestic Sun - 05-05-2021, 01:21 PM



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