Love Poem <3

[alonso ramoran]

Hi Miley,
enjoyed the read : ) comments below

We share
an alarm clock, I personally liked this better as one line. It felt more to-the-point
getting dressed and un- don't understand the line break here. I think what's going on is that you're trying to arrange this poem into a certain "shape" I guess? But you may be compromising the flow of the poem for aesthetics. If you're okay with that you can leave it as is, but as a reader I feel it takes away from the reading experience.
dressed, a pillow, and a mouth—
coming into our own
Ouroboros. 

Love is not if you want to make a somewhat sly reference to pop culture, you could bump "tinder" up to this line and break it there. You'll probably roll some eyes though lol
tinder, spark, flame, 
But abundance, abundance, abundance
abundance—we share
aurora borealis. This image felt pretty abrupt and unrelated to me, but it's probably because there is context behind the poem that I'm simply not aware of. Maybe it's something to do with the similarities in pronunciation between "ouroboros" and "aurora borealis"? But I still can't articulate a sound connection between the two that ties the poem together.

All the best,
Alex