02-23-2021, 12:12 AM
Cliche me into your worn out lips.
And when I’m about to fade into your headache put
me under your words.
Keep me innocent with your filthy mouth,
I want to be your argument,
the pain in your roughness when you scream.
Use me to fuck all the pretty girls and then
bend me over until I curve perfectly for
your poetry when you find
the one.
Hi arbil,
I took the liberty of breaking the lines differently in your first stanza as an example. This is one way I would do it. But it's your poem, so the line breaks should be in your voice. I don't know much about the technicalities of verse, but I think it's all about reading it aloud and listening to you where you pause. But then you can always let lines run over, just for variety and to change the rhythym a bit.
I'm sure others here will correct me if I'm misleading you on any of this.
And when I’m about to fade into your headache put
me under your words.
Keep me innocent with your filthy mouth,
I want to be your argument,
the pain in your roughness when you scream.
Use me to fuck all the pretty girls and then
bend me over until I curve perfectly for
your poetry when you find
the one.
Hi arbil,
I took the liberty of breaking the lines differently in your first stanza as an example. This is one way I would do it. But it's your poem, so the line breaks should be in your voice. I don't know much about the technicalities of verse, but I think it's all about reading it aloud and listening to you where you pause. But then you can always let lines run over, just for variety and to change the rhythym a bit.
I'm sure others here will correct me if I'm misleading you on any of this.