02-22-2021, 03:48 AM
Hey Miley,
This was really a soft well written piece.
I like the structure and the well-thought out line breaks....it really set the mood for this and made it more interesting because it’s hard to write a good love poem. It’s been done thousands of times in thousands of different ways so it’s hard to write one that’s really unique.
I kinda wish the second stanza had more to it because the first stanza was so strong with a sensual romantic imagery. I was kinda hoping the second stanza followed that same tone.
Since “we share” was one line in the first stanza, it would really emphasize the second stanza like the first if you made it one line. And since sharing seems to be the main idea behind the poem.
Overall, this was eloquent and lovely. I enjoyed it very much.
This was really a soft well written piece.
I like the structure and the well-thought out line breaks....it really set the mood for this and made it more interesting because it’s hard to write a good love poem. It’s been done thousands of times in thousands of different ways so it’s hard to write one that’s really unique.
I kinda wish the second stanza had more to it because the first stanza was so strong with a sensual romantic imagery. I was kinda hoping the second stanza followed that same tone.
Since “we share” was one line in the first stanza, it would really emphasize the second stanza like the first if you made it one line. And since sharing seems to be the main idea behind the poem.
Overall, this was eloquent and lovely. I enjoyed it very much.