02-19-2021, 11:51 AM
(02-19-2021, 11:10 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote: Miley, thanks for your comments. I'm a bit puzzled by it myself. I know there are multiple voices and one is mine. Just out of curiosity, how close to ghost hunter is my stanza? I mean do they actually listen for heartbeats and clap their hands? Never seen the show.Lol, not that close I think, I just mean in the way they are always saying stuff like "Make a sign if you are hear" And I guess i'll add that I'm realizing I tend to ask for clarity when critiquing poems, but I do think these things don't have to literally make sense, but they should feel like they mean something. There are parts of the poem that have an intuitive/felt coherence to me, the sticks, the heartbeat, the diddy dums, and the dead, the pieces are all there but its still lacking some overarching coherence for me. Just my 2 cents of course!