02-04-2021, 10:20 AM
PT,
Know I'm coming in late here. Anyway, I kind of prefer your pre-edit. I guess after bloody breast, it followed on that even dismemberment (not literal of course) wasn't off the table, so "made of the same parts" seemed appropriate.' I guess I shouldn't even be talking about a pre-edit, eh? So save that idea for another poem.
I was drawn into the poem by the repetition and it kept me going to the end. Good work.
Know I'm coming in late here. Anyway, I kind of prefer your pre-edit. I guess after bloody breast, it followed on that even dismemberment (not literal of course) wasn't off the table, so "made of the same parts" seemed appropriate.' I guess I shouldn't even be talking about a pre-edit, eh? So save that idea for another poem.
I was drawn into the poem by the repetition and it kept me going to the end. Good work.