02-03-2021, 01:41 AM
Some good stuff here, especially that last line. I think the whole line "They smell of mystery..." is very weak compared to the rest of the lines. I'd say just take it out, as it seems to add nothing for me. The previous lines don't need elaboration.
Story of the poem: the lights disappear, but then are calling to "me"....I know poems certainly don't need to be logical, but that halted me for moment from enjoying it all the way through.
Story of the poem: the lights disappear, but then are calling to "me"....I know poems certainly don't need to be logical, but that halted me for moment from enjoying it all the way through.