02-01-2021, 07:59 AM
This is a challenging poem to read. I like the short lines. Three things I don't like:
the bedbug mass: just too much somehow
and the two lines at end about fireflies and fish. i'd just take them out.
I assume we can comment more than once, so I may be back. I feel like I should be saying more. It's a thrill to read your lines.
the bedbug mass: just too much somehow
and the two lines at end about fireflies and fish. i'd just take them out.
I assume we can comment more than once, so I may be back. I feel like I should be saying more. It's a thrill to read your lines.