01-26-2021, 08:01 AM
Knot,
Thanks for the read and analysis.
What are 'Generational Sketches'?
Generational Sketches are a series of poems about different generational periods that I have been working on. This one is about the 60's.
This poem is basically about allusions from that time period (the 60's) many are song titles or lyrics.
The cake/pie allusion comes from the song "MacArthur Park", but is also an extended metaphor for selfishness, it references how many 60's folks still whine about how great the 60's was, but now it's lost.
"Someone left the cake out in the rain
I don't think that I can take it
'Cause it took so long to bake it
And I'll never have that recipe again
Oh, no!" -- from MacArthur Park.
"(bit confused about the significance of 'lost trust for the spirit in the sky' if 'god was dead')"
This references what happened after the Summer of Love in 1967. A number of people important to the counter culture had died (or been assassinated): Martin Luther King Jr. (Martin); Robert Kennedy (Bob) JFK (Jack);Janis Joplin (pearl);Jimi Hendrix (Jimi) Jim Morrison (Jim).
Buddy Holly died in a plane crash, thus "kiss the sky".
"man called Horse" references the movie "A man called horse".
God had been dead sine 1942, when the NYT declared him so, but this is a total loss of faith after the summer of love, when the idealism began to die. It references the song "Spirit in the sky" which promoted a kind of Pollyanna positivism.
"Spook" a derisive name for the "Holy Ghost" now that disillusionment has set in. Disillusion equals anger.
Your word choice problems is spot on. I never even saw that. Must be a writer's blind spot. I will keep an eye out for it in the future.
Thanks for the critique, I definitely see some ares for improvement.
dale
Thanks for the read and analysis.
What are 'Generational Sketches'?
Generational Sketches are a series of poems about different generational periods that I have been working on. This one is about the 60's.
This poem is basically about allusions from that time period (the 60's) many are song titles or lyrics.
The cake/pie allusion comes from the song "MacArthur Park", but is also an extended metaphor for selfishness, it references how many 60's folks still whine about how great the 60's was, but now it's lost.
"Someone left the cake out in the rain
I don't think that I can take it
'Cause it took so long to bake it
And I'll never have that recipe again
Oh, no!" -- from MacArthur Park.
"(bit confused about the significance of 'lost trust for the spirit in the sky' if 'god was dead')"
This references what happened after the Summer of Love in 1967. A number of people important to the counter culture had died (or been assassinated): Martin Luther King Jr. (Martin); Robert Kennedy (Bob) JFK (Jack);Janis Joplin (pearl);Jimi Hendrix (Jimi) Jim Morrison (Jim).
Buddy Holly died in a plane crash, thus "kiss the sky".
"man called Horse" references the movie "A man called horse".
God had been dead sine 1942, when the NYT declared him so, but this is a total loss of faith after the summer of love, when the idealism began to die. It references the song "Spirit in the sky" which promoted a kind of Pollyanna positivism.
"Spook" a derisive name for the "Holy Ghost" now that disillusionment has set in. Disillusion equals anger.
Your word choice problems is spot on. I never even saw that. Must be a writer's blind spot. I will keep an eye out for it in the future.
Thanks for the critique, I definitely see some ares for improvement.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.