01-01-2021, 01:06 AM
My opinions don't matter. They could be anyone. As could I. As could you. Even the narrator. Grown up and still pestered over something he stopped believing in decades ago.
All the sonics leave a gap, a hole, or a sentiment of straw. I'm more interested in the narrator, who obviously has some stake in the matter. The direction each line takes is guided by the inner and outer rhymes a-jingling, and since that's the case, the narrative, or the lyric, sounds more sketchy than complete. The content isn't as smoothly laid as it could be.
All the sonics leave a gap, a hole, or a sentiment of straw. I'm more interested in the narrator, who obviously has some stake in the matter. The direction each line takes is guided by the inner and outer rhymes a-jingling, and since that's the case, the narrative, or the lyric, sounds more sketchy than complete. The content isn't as smoothly laid as it could be.