12-30-2020, 02:15 PM
Dale,
Of course, it's from her perspective - to extend the metaphor, fish scales fell from her eyes so she was no longer blinded and could see the truth -
just like Paul and the charmless consequence of his revelation on the road to Damascus.
On the other hand, your own metaphor for musical scales is charming, but perhaps overstated, with ear drums and hammering - leave it subtle...
Descending and rising scales may serve better.
Overall, a thoughtful poem I enjoyed reading................Philip
Of course, it's from her perspective - to extend the metaphor, fish scales fell from her eyes so she was no longer blinded and could see the truth -
just like Paul and the charmless consequence of his revelation on the road to Damascus.
On the other hand, your own metaphor for musical scales is charming, but perhaps overstated, with ear drums and hammering - leave it subtle...
Descending and rising scales may serve better.
Overall, a thoughtful poem I enjoyed reading................Philip