Nursery Rhyme

[dukealien]

He kissed with his eyes
And I acted surprised,
As if my world hadn't crumbled
Half an hour ago.

I kissed with my smile
And we stood for a while,
As butterflies bumbled
In the crystal snow.

Your touch still lingered
And you twiddled your fingers,
As birds mumbled,
you love him so.

The chirps slowly died
with our lips and eyes,
As we stumbled
slowly home.

(Fiddled the format a little, above - watch out for odd/exposed formatting when pasting from a word processor!)

The rhyme scheme here is subtle, almost missed it until second reading.  That's nice, and while there is a point to be/being made with the very last line diverging from it, you might consider something equally brief and final there... perhaps ending in "go."

Also, in moderate, rhyming tends to go with an established meter.  As you edit, you might see how hard or easy it is to make the rhythm of each succeeding stanza match that of the first... or, anyway, make them all match each other.  It would be a strenuous exercise:  stretch your vocabulary and rhythmic sense.

Finally, and pardon the nit-picking, the use of capitalization is inconsistent.  Starting each line with a capital letter is considered archaic by some on this board (I mildly disagree) but is better than using sentence structure capitalization some places and the old style in others.  Try pickling one or the other (always capitalizing would not be amiss in a nursery rhyme) and applying it consistently, then see how you like the effect.

The poem has definite merits - see what you can do with edits.